What should a future roommate know about living with you?
What the evaluator is looking for
The evaluator wants warmth, self-awareness, and practical details that invite connection.
Planning approach
For A Note to My Future Roommate, select the central scene, identify the consequential choice, trace the specific response, and reserve the ending for evidence-supported reflection.
Model response
I make tea at inconvenient hours, label leftover containers with overly precise dates, and need ten quiet minutes after a crowded day before I can tell a coherent story. Please interrupt me if my alarm is vibrating under a pillow; I have slept through fire drills in movies. In return, I will share the electric kettle, remember how you take your coffee, and ask before borrowing anything, including desk space. I hope our room can hold both company and closed headphones. Also, I am always willing to walk to the dining hall for emergency fries, especially during unfinished-problem-set season. A good room, I think, makes both solitude and spontaneous fries possible without apology.
Structural breakdown
A Note to My Future Roommate progresses from a concrete situation through observable decisions and results. Its closing insight stays proportionate to the events shown instead of claiming a universal transformation.
- Verify that every detail in A Note to My Future Roommate serves its central question.
- Replace broad character claims with actions a reader can observe.
- Preserve other people as participants rather than props.
- Keep the final insight within the evidence of the response.
Format reference: Common App, Essay Prompts. This model is original and is not an official or accepted submission.